Thursday, November 14, 2013

SEVENTEEN SYLLABLES

17 syllables


more fun to catch raindrops and snowflakes on tongue,
than to catch a football.

pretty singing--she in shower--
on radio, Tristan Und Isolde

whirring is lawn mower motor--
as low overhead, jet engines screaming

fingers peck keyed letters,
cause computer to crunch many million codes

drinking all night put truth out of sight
till dawn brought me... reality

--steveroni

gay has us write american sentences  today…
 17 syllables… capture a scene… 
see you at 3pm EST when the doors open in Poets Pub "FormForAll"
THIS IS PLAIN F U N !!!

22 comments:

  1. tristand und isolde...nice.. always happy when i discover something german...smiles.... and yeah....catching rain or snow is def. more fun than catching a football...smiles... and that last one...ugh... reminded me of my dad...drinking def. puts truth out of sight..

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  2. Steve.. love the catching rain and snow... but the real one catching my attention was alas the last one..

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  3. my son would beg to differ on the football...ha...we have to throw it every day...rain or shine...inside or outside.....whats up with all the noise too, the mower and the plane...lol...and i hate to think of all the behind the scenes crunching needed to process our processing...

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  4. An everlasting dawn brought reality, I take it because you never let go of it once it came. Darkness never entered your world again.
    You were not talking about me in the shower because that is not pretty and you'd never know it's singing.

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  5. Hi Steve...I agree about raindrops on tongue. Definitely that is more fun!! And yes, sometimes drinking puts things out of sight...but they always surface again tomorrow. One can never REALLY escape reality. Great "American sentences."

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  6. Nice specially the first one, snowflakes on tongue ~ Good to see you Steve ~ Take care ~

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  7. Very nicely done, like the first one best!

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    1. Mystic-Mom. Wondering if your blog is blocked from public access...I cannot get there from here (not the first time I ever said THAT--grin!). If it's proper procedure, I'm asking you for a link.
      Thanks, Ma'am!

      PS I even tried from your comment on others' blogs, no luck!

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  8. Very, very nice. I can relate all to well to the last one. :-)

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  9. I would always know this is yours - each one has sound, has music and you wonderfully tied unlikely things together to transition that music and make it your very own. Wonderful.

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    1. Your comment is SO NICE--and appreciated, Gay. Thanks!

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  10. Reality catches up with us...you expressed it so well!

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  11. Nice ... I like the sentence in the photo! :)

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  12. Great! You really managed to capture a moment, a scene, in each sentence.

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  13. more fun to catch raindrops and snowflakes on tongue,
    than to catch a football...

    I just realized.. yeah. True

    last line.. until the reality..
    simply beautiful

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  14. there is presence of the day-to-day in this series. and some playful rhyming as well. wonderful work.

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  15. So well done and the last one - I know that feeling...
    Anna :o]

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  16. I like the first one as I remember catching snowflakes on my tongue nice memories there..these are
    all wonderfully crafted...

    Peace & Light my friend..

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  17. I like the inclusion of sounds in so many of these.

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  18. till dawn - brought me to reality. sigh.

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  19. I find this very atmospheric, a great style of writing.

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