17 syllables
more fun to catch raindrops and snowflakes on tongue,
than to catch a football.
pretty singing--she in shower--
on radio, Tristan Und Isolde
whirring is lawn mower motor--
as low overhead, jet engines screaming
fingers peck keyed letters,
cause computer to crunch many million codes
drinking all night put truth out of sight
till dawn brought me... reality
--steveroni
gay has us write american sentences today…
17 syllables… capture a scene…
see you at 3pm EST when the doors open in Poets Pub "FormForAll"
THIS IS PLAIN F U N !!!
THIS IS PLAIN F U N !!!
tristand und isolde...nice.. always happy when i discover something german...smiles.... and yeah....catching rain or snow is def. more fun than catching a football...smiles... and that last one...ugh... reminded me of my dad...drinking def. puts truth out of sight..
ReplyDeleteSteve.. love the catching rain and snow... but the real one catching my attention was alas the last one..
ReplyDeletemy son would beg to differ on the football...ha...we have to throw it every day...rain or shine...inside or outside.....whats up with all the noise too, the mower and the plane...lol...and i hate to think of all the behind the scenes crunching needed to process our processing...
ReplyDeleteAn everlasting dawn brought reality, I take it because you never let go of it once it came. Darkness never entered your world again.
ReplyDeleteYou were not talking about me in the shower because that is not pretty and you'd never know it's singing.
Hi Steve...I agree about raindrops on tongue. Definitely that is more fun!! And yes, sometimes drinking puts things out of sight...but they always surface again tomorrow. One can never REALLY escape reality. Great "American sentences."
ReplyDeleteNice specially the first one, snowflakes on tongue ~ Good to see you Steve ~ Take care ~
ReplyDeleteVery nicely done, like the first one best!
ReplyDeleteMystic-Mom. Wondering if your blog is blocked from public access...I cannot get there from here (not the first time I ever said THAT--grin!). If it's proper procedure, I'm asking you for a link.
DeleteThanks, Ma'am!
PS I even tried from your comment on others' blogs, no luck!
Very, very nice. I can relate all to well to the last one. :-)
ReplyDeleteI would always know this is yours - each one has sound, has music and you wonderfully tied unlikely things together to transition that music and make it your very own. Wonderful.
ReplyDeleteYour comment is SO NICE--and appreciated, Gay. Thanks!
DeleteReality catches up with us...you expressed it so well!
ReplyDeleteGreat! You really managed to capture a moment, a scene, in each sentence.
ReplyDeletemore fun to catch raindrops and snowflakes on tongue,
ReplyDeletethan to catch a football...
I just realized.. yeah. True
last line.. until the reality..
simply beautiful
there is presence of the day-to-day in this series. and some playful rhyming as well. wonderful work.
ReplyDeleteSo well done and the last one - I know that feeling...
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
I like the first one as I remember catching snowflakes on my tongue nice memories there..these are
ReplyDeleteall wonderfully crafted...
Peace & Light my friend..
I like the inclusion of sounds in so many of these.
ReplyDeleteamazing
ReplyDeletetill dawn - brought me to reality. sigh.
ReplyDeleteI find this very atmospheric, a great style of writing.
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