This poem written for dverse POETRY PUB'S
"Open Link Night" (opens every Tuesday at 3 PM EDT)
A CONVERSATION
A CONVERSATION
Dear one,
you are so loved
do you not comprehend?
there is nothing
which I do not
understand
you. one
honored, revered.
listen, hear
heart on fire
listening, hearing
deepest desire
burning, searing
no sense how
when or whence
but now...
I love you
no drama, no pride,
reason, nor fear.
explain neither, never,
from depth of your soul...
my very way of life
a devotional to
loving your loveable self,
not unemotional. but through
pain, struggle, belief--
achieving the unachievable.
Unbelievable!
Unbelievable!
a closeness exists
not understood.
(I perceive when your hand
on my cheek, on my body...
it is my own hand)
in our Universe
we are two-as-one
loving from star-to-star
between moon and sun
yet on earth and wherever
space may be found,
we inhabit, breathlessly
breathing as one...
with or without air
no longer is there I
no more is there you
this
our closeness,
did you know
when I fall asleep at night
it is your eyes that close?
yes
yes
--steveroni
Inspired by Pablo Neruda Sonnet XVII
Beautiful !loved it from deep with in . My favorite line is - did you know when I fall asleep at night
ReplyDeleteit is your eyes that close? Superb !
I love the sonnet that inspired you. And my most favorite of Neruda is 'I like your calm'.
Asbestos...
ReplyDeleteI mean, lead!
ReplyDeleteLately I've found a few Neruda's poems in my scarce blog journeys. That is a good poet, no doubt, haven't read much about him. Now I will.
ReplyDeleteLovely poem Steve E. Yes, I found YOU, how could I not?
Hope all is well.
EW
aww...so sweet a close and lovely verse steve...love the call and response of the two lovers...great stuff man...
ReplyDeleteThe last fours lines are absolutely wonderful. Sometimes things just echo in our souls...those words are echoing in mine. Just beautiful.
ReplyDeletewhat a delight!
ReplyDeleteKAVITA:
ReplyDeleteHey, I like calm also...yours, mine, everybody's. Gonna go read it now. Thanks, Kamera-Kav! Oops—please forgive?
PEACE!
CES:
Oh, Ces! Asbestos or lead. “Boys Just Wanna Have Fu-un...”
E WILBER:
Yup! I feel new with poetry, but love it! And finding so far c.100 poets I like, beginning with Brian Miller, who commented also above. Thank you for returning, reading, and commenting.
JOY!
BRIAN MILLER:
How can I thank you for these positive comments? Well....Thank you! Have a great weekend, Sir! What? Tuesday? You say it's only TUESDAY??? OOOOOOOooooooooooooooooo...PLOP!
such beautiful intimacy in these words steven..esp. love the last line with the falling asleep and the other's eyes close...
ReplyDeleteWonderufl loving desire put forth with this piece and that's my ten scents worth..haha
ReplyDeletelove like that brings life...magical.
ReplyDeletenor more I no more you.
ReplyDeleteso many poems reminding me of Dr Zhivago tody, which I finally saw yesterday for the first time (yes, ever) -- the Keira Knightly version.
There was no more her, no more him -- only one.
in fact, i'm here at the library with the original Omar Shariff DVD of it to watch tonight. Will be fun to see the similarities / differences in the 2 versions.
But enough of that!
your poem fills me with great boomerangs of hope that passion alone knows the name of.
xo
JANNIE:
ReplyDeleteBoomerangs of Hope...now where have I 'heard' that today? Hmmmm. Thank you so, for those kind words. Ya know, I hate to admit--but I have NEVER seen Dr Zhivago. But I must, I must. You inspire! See?
DAVID ALLEN WATERS:
Love IS life, man!--my opinion. And it is certainly magical. Sure appreciate you coming by tonight.
Thanks.
PAT HATT:
Do you really mean 'scents'? Hmmmm, I gotta read the poem again--grin! (I know you meant 'cents'...or DID you?!) Thank you for being nice and commenting today.
CLAUDIA:
Intimacy...yessss! Does that mean we might each and all be a part of the whole? Therefore we are all in each other? You may be Right! Although you didn't quite SAY those things--grin! For you to stop by here pleases me a lot. thank you.
MAGPIE:
That is two times in a row you have written something really nice to me. I'm feeling "on top of the world"! Thank you.
PEACE!
EVERYDAY GODDESS:
YOU are GoooD, girl. Thank you.
love the style of this, the conversation, filled with lots of love and beauty.
ReplyDelete"did you know
ReplyDeletewhen I fall asleep at night
it is your eyes that close?"
So sweet!
I love the intimacy in this....it is sweet and perfect!
ReplyDeleteI love your close Steve and the integrity of your love is woven through this piece.
ReplyDeleteThis section, in particular is beautiful
a closeness exists
not understood.
(I perceive when your hand
on my cheek, on my body...
it is my own hand)
I have to be honest though, if there are two words I feel should be avoided in love poetry they are 'heart' and 'soul' unless you use them in such a way that makes them fresh and interesting.
Beautiful - the kind of connection we all long for.
ReplyDeleteSteve...this is so lovely, but I wasn't thinking of two lovers...it seems to me to be a passionate exchange of love between God and another.
ReplyDeleteIn anycase, it is a deep and transposing poem...haunting in the very best sense.
I'm holding on the God Conversation because it gives me great hope right now.
But in anycase, beautiful. Not a misstep here in these lines...they are so intimate and loving. and isn't this is how it is to be?
Lady Nyo
The dream that is reality...so dreamily expressed. :-)
ReplyDeleteOh beautiful and the last lines sum that love up so very nice Steve...Blessings to you..bkm
ReplyDeleteYour gentle and romantic soul comes out here so beautifully....
ReplyDeleteHappy day ~
Good stuff :) As always...
ReplyDelete..Mister, this piece inspires me in so many ways.. i love the voices speaking as one and the many tangible wisdom you shed in here.. your last verse is splendid.. thank you for writing this!(:
ReplyDeleteBrightest blessings!
~Kelvin
So lovely and intimate!
ReplyDeleteThat last clutch of lines caused me to open my eyes a little larger, they so captured me. Very nice, Steve.
ReplyDeleteHello Steve.
ReplyDeleteNice tight poem. Loved the ending.
I'd never heard of Pablo Neruda until someone mentioned him in their comment a couple of months ago.
Awesome!
Thanks for the visit. Much appreciated.
your posts are always beautiful and deep
ReplyDeleteMRS MEDIOCRITY:
ReplyDeleteThanks to you Mrs M...anything BUT mediocre you are!
DARKANGELWRITES:
Girl, your wrote “So sweet!” Now I need to get a HERSHEY BAR!!! It's those little 'trigger' words!--grin. THANK you!
AYALA:
Intimate? Yes, I suppose so, in a vaguely platonic sort of way. Oh! I see. Intimacy does not mean 'sex'...right. So you are right on. VERY close, though! In maybe a spiritual scenario. Thank for getting me to rethink this set of words!
PEACE!
CARYS:
I would want you to be NOTHING less than honest here, Ms Carys.
Thank you so much for the tip. It will be in good use from now on, except for mayb “heartfelt” and/or “soulful”. If all knew how we appreciate a little help now and then, this could be a real learning experience.
PEACE to you.....
CRYSTAL:
Yes, connection. But we gotta start somewhere. And that means stop isolating, and get out there!
LADY NYO:
You are so positive and supportive here. Thank you so much. Can you look and find something which I can correct, without too much 'effort'? I'm beginning to like that word “intimate”. I even heard a bishop one day talking about an “Intimate Relationship, and found out he meant with God—grin!
JOANNE ELLIOTT:
ReplyDeleteYup, maybe I was dreaming this last night—grin! Somehow it got into the blog. Glad you are here. Thanks!
SIGNED...BKM
WOW! And blessings are for real. I know that. Thank you, Barbara
HEAVEN:
Or by any name is 'heaven'! Yup, always was a 'romantic', but it was not very macho to admit that from age 6 to 60 heheh. Now, I'll admit to anything.--grin! Thank you, Heaven. You are a kind Peep!
KRISTIN:
Always here to cheer me on. Thank you, girl. Hopefully, this week id GooooD! For you. “We absolutely insist on enjoying life!” RIGHT!
PEACE!
WINDOWLAD:
ReplyDeleteThank you, Kelvin. Ya know, I enjoy 'speaking'-type poems...it almost gives me a sense of writing a scene in a play. (Never thought of that until right now.) I'll be around to visit—hey, I already have! PEACE!
MAMA ZEN:
There's my new 'favorite word' again: Intimate! It is lovely to me that you visit here, Ma'am. Thank you.
JOE HESCH:
Thank you...I've seen you around somewhere today...hmmmm. I'll try to retrace the steps! Kidding. Boy, ya gotta be careful with that word 'kidding'. One slip, and you're writing 'kissing'--grin!
PEACE!
ANDY:
Pablo Neruda—not real name, is from lot of places, but they say he's from Chile. Ya know, ALL these good writers have interesting bios. But when I get to reading about them, I forget to blog. HEY! Maybe that would be a goof thing—grin!
CHICK FLICK JOURNAL:
Gosh, girl. Thank you, that is very kind. I don't feel 'deep',, because there is always too much going on for introspecting. Eat and drink well—live well, and be filled with JOY! And PEACE! Thank you!
dEEP FEELINGS EXPRESSED BRILLIANTLY.
ReplyDeleteThis is a fantastic write...love the presentation. Actually, I'm prone to having conversations like this with my alter ego, the duality of self ;) (Sorry, couldn't resist) Truth be told I've been known to over think ... but truly loved your write!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, I was just thinking about how we are all one in the same on my writing blog today. It is an amazing truth which you capture well here.
ReplyDeleteSHEILA MOORE:
ReplyDeleteMore and more I am finding Peeps who think somewhere along those lines...Buddha-like. Thank you.
NATASHA:
When you 'talk to yourself'...please make sure you respect each others' opinions—grin! I LIKE that idea. Actually, I suppose writers do a lot of conversing with their “other”...
PEACE!
JAGDISH BALI:
Thank you for reading, also for your comment.
PEACE, Jag!
Wowww... It could be towards a lover.. it could be towards oneself.. either way, this feel of love is beautiful! And I really liked the way you have expressed it here.. in the form of a conversation... sweetly done!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and tender words that express how two can be as one, such a wonder when it happens. Enjoyed it Steve.
ReplyDeleteHaven't visited for a while, Steve, but I'm happy to have read this one on my return.....I'll need to visit more regularly.....I've been a fool to myself......!♥!
ReplyDeleteKAVITA:
ReplyDeleteThank you, India woman. For your visit
and blog-friendship. And for giving me the experience of your most beautiful country.
PEACE!
HEDGEWITCH:
Yes, when a love like described here becomes a happening--it is one full of wonder, amazement! Thank you for your words.
LENA:
I do not remember where you from, so will have to check it out. Thank you for commenting, so I see you again!
PEACE!
This is beautiful!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and so touching .You are a blessed writer :).
ReplyDeletevery clever idea and very sweet....
ReplyDeleteThanx for dropping by my blog!!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, intense love poem.
ReplyDeletethat last line made me smile
ReplyDeleteJUST BECAUSE TODAY:
ReplyDeleteThat last line made me smile too--grin!
GLYNN:
Thank you, man. I appreciate that kind of comment--heeheehee!
PEACE!
JACKIE PARKES:
A pleasure. And thank you also!
BLACKSWAN POETRY:
Yourself, a master of cleverness, honors me to suggest my 'cleverness'.
Thank you!
Anonymous:
The word blessed stands out...thank you...friend! PEACE!
ANNA AT GARDEN:
You, too, are kind. thank you.
I could have not missed this beauty. I am glad i scrolled down to find it.
ReplyDeleteThis is the most romantic of conversations. Love exists. You are an expression of It.
How I wish one day I get that far in feelings... Walking straight to it.
Love the end of this poem. love it, love it, love it.
Yes
Dulce